14.
I couldn’t open my eyes. I could feel soft earth beneath my head, the cold sheet of snow beneath my outstretched hand. I pulled it toward me and felt my face. My eyes were covered with something. Pick, pick, pick with my broken fingernails.
While I picked, I listened. I could hear the wind outside and the creak of snow and burdened wood. There was a heaviness in my chest and I could hear the others breathing.
And the smell was everywhere. Sharp and cold like money. I couldn’t swallow. My mouth was dry, my lips cracked. I peeled thin strips of mucus from my eyes and opened one of them to harsh blue light.
There was a new sound. An old sound, half-remembered. A soft popping like snow melting under sunlight, uncovering bodies preserved in amber ice. Still the hurgh, hurgh of breathing.
All at once, my eyes were focused.
Soft earth became a hospital bed. Hurgh, hurgh and a breathing tube stopped my swallows. Melting snow was the soft beep of a heart monitor and my eyes – the one I had left – covered with burn dressings.
And the clink of handcuffs linked my wrist to the metal bed.
by Leatherdykeuk on blogspot
The End
Hey! We did it - thank you so much everyone!
But, as Columbo might say, there's just one more thing . . . Before I can load the whole story on to my website, you may have noticed that we're missing a title.
2 more days, as few words as you like - ALL suggestions welcome
5 comments:
Snowbleed?
Woot! You used my ending! (I forgot to italicise 'pick, pick, pick' and 'hurgh, hurgh')
Apologies, my fault completely (brain full of snow. Or something), the italics should now be there . . .
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Just to say a HUGE well done!
I am so impressed by this undertaking and the final product.
Please do keep blogging. Please.
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It's been fun!
Have 3 simple titles to suggest:
The Cabin
Thaw
Blue Light
(out of these 3 I like 'Blue Light' the best)
Thank you Caroline! (although it is most definitely all the fab writers who've joined in who are truly impressive)But I'm definitely going to continue blogging - you can't get rid of me now (uh oh)
Cheers too everybody for the titles so far. I'm liking lots so I may have to choose by picking one out of a hat (a suitably hunting cabin kind of hat with ear flaps maybe. Or perhaps a bobble hat (:)
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